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Post by -_CreepeR_- Mon Apr 22, 2013 5:17 am

Woopty friggidy doo. As some of you bastards might know *sough* melo*cough* I've been working on writing a book for some time now. The process is dreadfully slow since every page requires so much rewriting and re-editing that i can barely dish out a completed page two three times a week (which, considering the amount of material would mean that it'd take me 5 years to finish the book, yowza) Soooooo a few weeks back i got in touch with one published writer, asking him for some tips. Long story short we came up on a big source of my problems - since i've been planning every nook and cranny, and every little detail in my head for YEARS when i actually start to write many of the details get omitted, because my idiot brain fills in the blanks itself. Which is a horrible thing. So he suggested i get some practice at "spontaneous writing", that is writing with no planning whatsoever - and get experience at giving detail to my stuff on the fly, thus making my writing less dry. So what better to do that if not our idiotic band of lazy inactive idiots?

So yesterday night i came up with a story (well, not story, more of a setting from which teh stories will come) and quickly wrote up teh first short chapter. It stars heavily fictionalized versions of 6 more prominent SN members. (again, HEAVILY fictionalized, i'm not like that in real life ffs). I only have a vague idea of where to take the FIRST short story, so pretty much anything can happen. Since this is for training i will probably dabble in everything i can. Maybe i'll make Hema an alien? Who knows what will spring into my twisted mind xD

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE comment and critique on what feels wrong. I keep feeling that everything i write is incredibly rushed, which is a very very VERY bad thing. The chapters are virtually unedited, so what you see is what i wrote on the first go. I will update a new chapter TWICE A WEEK on wednesdays and saturdays. You can find the story in it's appropriate section on the main page. Toodles!! Very Happy

Story 1 - Chapter 1
Story 1 - Chapter 2


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Post by hemagoku Mon Apr 22, 2013 6:25 am

aa too long post
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Mon Apr 22, 2013 6:26 am

go read it you bastard! xD
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Post by hemagoku Mon Apr 22, 2013 6:27 am

maybe i ll check it later xD, seriously too tired today xD + busy for next few days, so ya, maybe bit lot later xD.
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Post by Silent_Assassin Mon Apr 22, 2013 6:30 am

Well, since you asked so nicely, I will read this and keep up to date, depending on how much I like it and how bored I am. bounce
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Post by hemagoku Mon Apr 22, 2013 6:31 am

ah i actually ended up reading the post anyway Sad, hope i am in the story xD.
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Mon Apr 22, 2013 6:33 am

@SA, well i'm keeping the chapters quite short for that reason too - reading 20 pages long post would be a commitment. (Although "short" is relative, that one chapter is over 2000 words.)

@Hema, you're in it, so go read xD
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Post by Silent_Assassin Mon Apr 22, 2013 9:23 am

That chapter you wrote is 1400+ words bro! Don't get me excited by saying its over 2000, for a second I thought my assignment was looking a lot easier!!!
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Mon Apr 22, 2013 9:35 am

Well still, without teh bigass title and double spacing that is less than 2 pages of text. While it should be 6+.
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Post by Silent_Assassin Mon Apr 22, 2013 9:40 am

I see, well, perhaps other chapters should be around 2500 words or more, get in the habit of writing decent length chapters
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Mon Apr 22, 2013 9:44 am

Well these are bite sized for a reason Razz originally i wanted to just post 1 page at a time XD
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Mon Apr 22, 2013 4:35 pm

As a bit of enticement for you guys to keep reading i'll post teh second chapter as well Very Happy This one i persnally like a lot more. Hope y'guys like it Very Happy
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Post by Liene Tue Apr 23, 2013 5:53 am

I'm curious Very Happy Gonna read it right away Very Happy

I totally forgot that SA was in here for some reason 210
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Tue Apr 23, 2013 5:55 am

Don't forget to comment, i need critique xD

And SA was here for a loong time. Except we knew him as Roronoa Zoro Razz Very Happy
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Post by Liene Tue Apr 23, 2013 6:12 am

First chapter done Very Happy I like it Very Happy And I commented it.

Right...there was something
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Tue Apr 23, 2013 6:17 am

Well go read chapter two xD
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Post by Liene Tue Apr 23, 2013 6:31 am

Done with it Very Happy Where's three?
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Tue Apr 23, 2013 6:57 am

Oh c'mon, at this rate you'll force me to post all teh chapters i had written in advance xD It was supposed to be just saturday and wednesday! XD
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Post by Liene Tue Apr 23, 2013 7:00 am

Okay Sad I'll try to be patient Sad
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Tue Apr 23, 2013 7:05 am

Yess yessssss, time to teach teh art of patience to the mortal young'uns. Yesssssssssssssssssss Twisted Evil

Well alright, i seem to be in a good mojo for writing this week, so i'll post another chapter tomorrow Razz Except this time i'll actually bother to proofread it xD
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Post by Liene Tue Apr 23, 2013 7:07 am

No more she Ramis? Grin
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Tue Apr 23, 2013 7:10 am

No more she Ramis xD It's actually quite annoying to write anything about him, since Word keeps thinking that Rami is a plural of Ramus, and keep bloody autocorrecting it xD Like "Rami were clearly getting anxious" or "rami waved their hands at Liene" and etc xD
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Post by Liene Tue Apr 23, 2013 7:12 am

Nice going of word 210
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Post by -_CreepeR_- Tue Apr 23, 2013 7:13 am

Yeah, first time i noticed it it was pretty hilarious xD
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Post by Liene Tue Apr 23, 2013 7:18 am

That's something I believe Very Happy
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