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the SN story.
Woopty friggidy doo. As some of you bastards might know *sough* melo*cough* I've been working on writing a book for some time now. The process is dreadfully slow since every page requires so much rewriting and re-editing that i can barely dish out a completed page two three times a week (which, considering the amount of material would mean that it'd take me 5 years to finish the book, yowza) Soooooo a few weeks back i got in touch with one published writer, asking him for some tips. Long story short we came up on a big source of my problems - since i've been planning every nook and cranny, and every little detail in my head for YEARS when i actually start to write many of the details get omitted, because my idiot brain fills in the blanks itself. Which is a horrible thing. So he suggested i get some practice at "spontaneous writing", that is writing with no planning whatsoever - and get experience at giving detail to my stuff on the fly, thus making my writing less dry. So what better to do that if not our idiotic band of lazy inactive idiots?
So yesterday night i came up with a story (well, not story, more of a setting from which teh stories will come) and quickly wrote up teh first short chapter. It stars heavily fictionalized versions of 6 more prominent SN members. (again, HEAVILY fictionalized, i'm not like that in real life ffs). I only have a vague idea of where to take the FIRST short story, so pretty much anything can happen. Since this is for training i will probably dabble in everything i can. Maybe i'll make Hema an alien? Who knows what will spring into my twisted mind xD
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE comment and critique on what feels wrong. I keep feeling that everything i write is incredibly rushed, which is a very very VERY bad thing. The chapters are virtually unedited, so what you see is what i wrote on the first go. I will update a new chapter TWICE A WEEK on wednesdays and saturdays. You can find the story in it's appropriate section on the main page. Toodles!!
Story 1 - Chapter 1
Story 1 - Chapter 2
So yesterday night i came up with a story (well, not story, more of a setting from which teh stories will come) and quickly wrote up teh first short chapter. It stars heavily fictionalized versions of 6 more prominent SN members. (again, HEAVILY fictionalized, i'm not like that in real life ffs). I only have a vague idea of where to take the FIRST short story, so pretty much anything can happen. Since this is for training i will probably dabble in everything i can. Maybe i'll make Hema an alien? Who knows what will spring into my twisted mind xD
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE comment and critique on what feels wrong. I keep feeling that everything i write is incredibly rushed, which is a very very VERY bad thing. The chapters are virtually unedited, so what you see is what i wrote on the first go. I will update a new chapter TWICE A WEEK on wednesdays and saturdays. You can find the story in it's appropriate section on the main page. Toodles!!
Story 1 - Chapter 1
Story 1 - Chapter 2
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Re: the SN story.
aa too long post
xD
xD
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Re: the SN story.
maybe i ll check it later xD, seriously too tired today xD + busy for next few days, so ya, maybe bit lot later xD.
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Re: the SN story.
Well, since you asked so nicely, I will read this and keep up to date, depending on how much I like it and how bored I am.
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ah i actually ended up reading the post anyway , hope i am in the story xD.
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@SA, well i'm keeping the chapters quite short for that reason too - reading 20 pages long post would be a commitment. (Although "short" is relative, that one chapter is over 2000 words.)
@Hema, you're in it, so go read xD
@Hema, you're in it, so go read xD
Re: the SN story.
That chapter you wrote is 1400+ words bro! Don't get me excited by saying its over 2000, for a second I thought my assignment was looking a lot easier!!!
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Re: the SN story.
Well still, without teh bigass title and double spacing that is less than 2 pages of text. While it should be 6+.
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I see, well, perhaps other chapters should be around 2500 words or more, get in the habit of writing decent length chapters
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Re: the SN story.
Well these are bite sized for a reason originally i wanted to just post 1 page at a time XD
Re: the SN story.
As a bit of enticement for you guys to keep reading i'll post teh second chapter as well This one i persnally like a lot more. Hope y'guys like it
Re: the SN story.
I'm curious Gonna read it right away
I totally forgot that SA was in here for some reason
I totally forgot that SA was in here for some reason
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Re: the SN story.
Don't forget to comment, i need critique xD
And SA was here for a loong time. Except we knew him as Roronoa Zoro
And SA was here for a loong time. Except we knew him as Roronoa Zoro
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First chapter done I like it And I commented it.
Right...there was something
Right...there was something
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Re: the SN story.
Done with it Where's three?
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Oh c'mon, at this rate you'll force me to post all teh chapters i had written in advance xD It was supposed to be just saturday and wednesday! XD
Re: the SN story.
Okay I'll try to be patient
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Yess yessssss, time to teach teh art of patience to the mortal young'uns. Yesssssssssssssssssss
Well alright, i seem to be in a good mojo for writing this week, so i'll post another chapter tomorrow Except this time i'll actually bother to proofread it xD
Well alright, i seem to be in a good mojo for writing this week, so i'll post another chapter tomorrow Except this time i'll actually bother to proofread it xD
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No more she Ramis?
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No more she Ramis xD It's actually quite annoying to write anything about him, since Word keeps thinking that Rami is a plural of Ramus, and keep bloody autocorrecting it xD Like "Rami were clearly getting anxious" or "rami waved their hands at Liene" and etc xD
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Nice going of word
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That's something I believe
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